Urgent Extra Credit Blog

     In my five part paragraph, one thing I had a problem with was the use of too many commas, making many run-on, seemingly never-ending sentences. I read my sentences outloud to myself to after writing them, to make sure they sounded fine and didn't drag on. Another thing I worked on was the repetition of words. I felt that in the first five-part paragraph, some words tended to sound a bit repetitive. To fix this problem, when I would start typing a word I had used already, I looked the word up on Thesaurus.com to find a suitable synonym. I really hope that working on these two things really developed my five-part paragraph into an interesting, unique piece of writing. I will be able to use the critique from this one on further paragraphs I write as well.